tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5352659023554321116.post6638261879311895541..comments2022-11-09T09:28:59.339-05:00Comments on <center>Nomadic Ink</center>: The Octopus circa 1957Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15334812243182354729noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5352659023554321116.post-31473240857786923102009-07-20T12:44:33.348-04:002009-07-20T12:44:33.348-04:00I begged to get off the last I went on too. I'...I begged to get off the last I went on too. I'm not sure we were wrong with the stories in the news about carnival rides lately. <br /><br />well, we will just <br />well should be capitalized.<br /><br />“Let’s go see if we can win a bear and then see some of the horse show.<br />Needs " after show.<br /><br />The back story seems to be Andy's father is out of the picture eithter through death or divorce and his mom neglecting him because of her job and friends. They definately were going through a rough patch - Actually this was the first time Andy could remember going anywhere with his mother since she started working the swing shift. <br />Andy seems to have wanted an evening with his mother to himself.<br /><br />As to whether the dialog is believable, it is mostly except at the end when Andy says <br />“Maybe we’ll ride that again next year.” My impression is Andy is young, five maybe? and I am not sure he would have the maturity to say that right after having the daylights scared out of him.<br />Hope this helps.<br />Helen<br /><br />Is there any way to change the color to help with the critique?Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12091282670551276740noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5352659023554321116.post-16086084255968519072009-05-23T19:59:03.697-04:002009-05-23T19:59:03.697-04:00Great story Tony! 1957 - is this one of your new ...Great story Tony! 1957 - is this one of your new short stories for the collection? I can so remember riding the Octupus for the first time at the Mercer County Fair - just like Andy, I wanted to get off. Although I love roller coasters, I still can stand to go around in circles.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15334812243182354729noreply@blogger.com